When we where in the port of Hoorn, we had decided to go for a run in the morning. So I woke up at 6, went outside to do my own exercises first. It was a little bit foggy and cold because the sun hadn’t gone up yet. But as soon as the sun started to come up, you could feel the heat from the sun onto your body, it felt nice because there was a small breeze, but sun at the same time.
At 7:30, the others came out to go for the run. We ran through the village of Hoorn, the roads where not very well taken care off. The streets where narrow and the houses looked very plain everywhere. It was a very quiet morning, the only thing you could hear where the birds, the wind going through the trees and the footsteps of us running. As soon as we got to the lake, we went into our swimsuits and got ready to swim.
The people that where swimming were Dominic, Aniket, Veer, Andrew and I. We first had to get over a long layer of rocks, these rocks felt like walking on ice because they where very slippy from algae. Veer slipped there but stood up and kept going. After that it got even harder, now we had to walk over the rocks with algae but they where underwater so you couldn’t see them. After that you got into the water. As soon as my foot touched the water, I realised how cold it was. It felt like going into an ice cube, but liquid, like an ice bath. Apparently it was around 3-4 degrees. When I got all the way in, you could feel the coldness affecting your muscles, it sort of gave you either muscle spasms, or a cramp. After swimming about 30 meters, I felt something painful in my foot, I thought it were the fishes or something, because I felt the pain like 10 meters after again. But as soon as I got out, I saw it was a cut rather than a bite. It was bleeding, but I didn’t have anything I could clean it with, so I just left it, put on my socks and shoes and started running in the hope that my sock wouldn’t get too dirty from the cut. It did hurt while running but it wasn’t very painful so I was fine. It was also very cold while running because of that breeze, the wind came onto the spots that were still wet and made it even colder. But after running about 400 meters I was nice and warm again. When I got back to the boat, I cleaned up the wound and got a nice warm tea with the taste of lemon and some honey in it.
Matthias Mulder English Lesson 
first of all great job!
I really like the fact that you gave so much details about the senses and how you felt about certain situations. I felt like the details you added made more life and helped me visualise it easier.
I think the best image you gave was when you described how you felt when you dipped your feet in the water because I know how it feels and can relate to it “When I got all the way in, you could feel the coldness affecting your muscles, it sort of gave you either muscle spasms, or a cramp. ”
One thing I suggest that you can improve is adding more description about when you ran in the morning.
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This is great, Matthias! You’ve done a good job using imagery and the senses to make your description come to life. Here’s one example of a well-written sentence of description: “It was a very quiet morning, the only thing you could hear where the birds, the wind going through the trees and the footsteps of us running.”
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