REN2 and Steve Willick’s adventure to the view.
“Where are we even going?” Says REN2, he sounds irritated yet curious. REN2 was forced to go with Steve somewhere, he did not say where.
“You’ll see, just have a little patience.” Steve confidently responded. He steadily and quickly keeps walking, cutting through the thick branches and vines in his way. The thick forest just kept going and going.
“Are we almost there? We don’t want to go to far from the ship.” REN2 says worrying about getting lost in this strange planet.
“We’re here.” Steve responds immediately.
“What are we supposed to look at?” REN2 says frustrated and confused. Steve notices REN2 looking the wrong way and says
“REN you’re looking the wrong way, look here.”. Steve turns REN2 around to the right view. REN2 opens his robotic eye out of wonderment. It is a beautiful view of the planet and the forest they were in, it looks very magical, especially because the sun is setting at the same time.
“If I had a jaw to drop open I would.” REN2 says in a comedic yet surprised tone.
“This planet has more to explore than we thought.” Steve responds in an energetic and adventurous tone.
“How about this, we go back to the ship, lock it, and go on an adventure, I want to know what there is on this wonderous planet.” REN2 Says with excitement.
“Sounds good REN, sounds good.” Steve says in a dreamy tone staring at the beautiful view of this planet.
You’re using dialogue to further the story, which is good, but the punctuation needs to be reviewed. For example, I’ve made corrections here:
“You’ll see – just have a little patience,” Steve confidently responded. (comma after ‘patience’).
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I forgot to add: please be careful with unnecessary switches in verb tense.
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