Create an article to explain how celebrities can influence us and shape our identities and relationships. Support your article by including references to examples. Justify your response with details that support your understanding or perception of the global context identities and relationships .
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Celebrities can have a huge influence on their fans and how their identity and relationships get shaped. Since celebrities have a strong voice to many people, anything they say affects the people hearing it. Everyone knows them, everyone follows them at least a couple celebrities, and we always check what they’re up to. Now if a celebrity give an opinion about something, this will have major affects on the people reading it and on the topic the celebrity is writing about. For instance, a celebrity such as Adam Sandler gives a negative opinion about a restaurant he went to. This restaurant is going to have a lot less clients due to Adam Sandler’s statement. Most celebrities don’t use their powerful status as a way to bring others down, but it does happen. This is why advertisers reach out to celebrities, or just famous people in general, because people listen to them.
How this relates to the affect of relationships. Imagine a celebrity states a quote that surrounds the topic of friends, and the toxicity. This quote could have an affect on many of that celebrity’s fans since they realize the person they are inspired by thinks a certain way, so they might think the same way. So if the quote is about the toxicity of fake friends, it might make the fans realize who in their friend group has this.
Now of course if a fan gets to meet his favorite celebrity, that’s a life changer. A celerity has a lot of pressure since anything he/she says, the fan will never forget. I remember a short video of Justin Bieber and one of his dying fans. This fan had dwarfism. Justin Bieber was saying hello to all his other fans, but totally ignoring this guy. Now, this man with dwarfism will never forget that moment, since in the video you can hear he’s crushed by this act. This had a big impact on the identity of this fan.
To sum this all up, celebrities have a huge impact on the identities and relationships of their fans, or on just people in general. Its up to them if their impact is positive or negative. I have seen that most celebrities use their voice to spread positivity, but there have been many encounters of negative impacts on peoples identities because of celebrities.
Matthias Mulder English Lesson 
B: You have a clear structure in your paragraphing and you build onto your points well, however, I am not sure if the first paragraph is the introduction of a main body paragraph. C: I think your points are all very relevant. You refer back to the global context, you use examples and you are constantly addressing things that celebrities do, so this was done very well. D: There are a few minor mistakes that could have been avoided by proof reading, however, without those there is a great flow in your work and and you use. good connectors between paragraphs. For next time just be sure to proofread. 🙂
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I think that this was a very good article. It was good that you used many specific examples, such as the Adam Sandler and Justin Bieber ones. I think that using those examples shows that you are knowledgeable on this topic and help deliver your point. I think that the structure of the article was also good, as you had an introduction followed by several points and examples, and then a summary at the end. I would say that to improve this you can maybe add examples from your own experiences.
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